Ode to black, a herd of cattle, happily mooing in the late afternoon shadow,
Ode to blue a wave of glory, a chance to be the best,
Ode to green, a jewel of it's greatest worth, the gifts of which we send each other,
Ode to red the sunset curls, burning through the clouds,
Ode to purple, the lilacs sing, a color for the royal,
Ode to yellow, smiley faces grinning ear to ear,
Ode to brown the stinking mud squishing through my toes,
Ode to those who see these colors and remember what they're worth,
Open your eyes and find of that you may have left behind, the vision to see what none can be, made for just you and I.
This piece was really well said and had a deap meaning that was really cool and thoughtful.
ReplyDeleteThere were a few spots where you didn't put commas after "Ode to ___." It is very deep.
ReplyDeleteI really like this, it makes me feel like your paying attention to even the little details of the world and that makes a really good entry. This is deep and meaningful, but fun and eye-opening at the same time!
ReplyDeletemeg u spelled deep wrong. its cooler like deap i think.
ReplyDeleteThis is a good entry. I like your second to last line. When you said brown, I was sure you were going to say chocolate!
ReplyDeletesheesh u have no idea how much control i have over my addiction!
ReplyDeleteThis was a really cool idea for a poem! You should add an author's note sharing what your inspiration was. It was cool how you used some of the different senses. Great!
ReplyDeleteI loved the poem. There was the fun repetition, and in the tradition of a sonnet, you provide an answer to the poem in the last couple lines. I would consider changing "I" to "me" at the end, both because it would be grammatically correct, and the rhyme scheme works better.
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