Many people in today's society become attached, a little too closely, to material objects. These objects may include money, possessions, or even... fruit? In a snowy isle of Russia, there is a woman who is extremely attached to her pet blueberry. This Halloween she lost her blueberry in a freak accident involving a food disposal and this woman has never gotten over it. Is it possible for today's human beings to love material objects as much as they might love a family member?
Unless this pet blueberry actually existed, it sounds like you combined your essay hook with your short story hook! It is actually an interesting combination.
ReplyDeleteAs a story hook, I would imagine the story being about the woman with the blueberry, and I would be wondering what might happen to her. As an essay hook, you have a clear thesis that you could explore, though the example of the blueberry might be considered too much detail. Overall, good job! You managed to write two good hooks with one shot!